Our first in-class assignment was to write some mini-sagas (50 word stories). We looked at some interesting stories written 10 years ago by students in England. My favorite was #7, An Open Mind (the robot story). What was yours?
Please post your own stories in the comments.
Whose Father is the fastest
ReplyDeleteChildren argued whose father is the fastest. A said: My father caught a falling off vase from the table.
B said:My father shot a deer from 50 meters away catching it before it fell.
C said: My father is a civil servant. He always comes home before 5 p.m. .
Funny story! I enjoyed the joke. You can improve your writing by making a few simple changes.
ReplyDeleteWhose Father Is The Fastest?
Three children were arguing over whose father was the fastest.
A said: My father caught a vase falling off the table.
B said: My father shot a deer from 50 meters away and caught it before it fell.
C said: My father is a civil servant. He always gets home before the 5 o'clock bell stops ringing.
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Whose Father Is The Fastest?
[1st letters in titles are often capitalized]
Three children were arguing over whose father was the fastest.
["BE + -ing" emphasizes that it took a while before they agreed (and maybe you didn't give all of the reasons). This makes the last sentence funnier]
A said: My father caught a vase falling off the table.
My father caught a vase {[which was] falling off the table}.
{...} modifies "a vase"; "which was" is left out
Practice using postmodifers. Your English will sound better
B said: My father shot a deer from 50 meters away and caught it before it fell.
[Notice the "AND"; AND normally goes between two things which are similar: I like apples AND bananas (NOT "I like apples and computers" or "apples and going to the movies"). BOTH of your verbs should be PAST tense: SHOT and CAUGHT]
C said: My father is a civil servant. He always gets home before the 5 o'clock bell stops ringing.
Getting home before 5 o'clock is not really so special. Many people start early and leave early. If you say "before the bell stops ringing," readers will think: "Aha! He is supposed to leave at 5:00, but he leaves his office before the bell starts. He is so lazy and shameless that he GETS home before the bell has stopped. "GET" means "is able to do this thing."
One day, a faithful dog was looking after the house for his master. A pig came by and you only have food to eat after you watch the house. I don't have to work, but i have food to eat. The dog said, Yes but when you weigh over 200 kilos, they will kill you.
ReplyDeleteThe dog and the pig
ReplyDeleteA dog was sitting outside the door looking at everyone carefully. A pig laughs at him and says:"How stupid! You work so hard but don't earn much food." The dog glances the pig and says:"Yes,you can eat as much as possible until you weigh over 200 kilos...."
One day have a faith dog to look after the house for a his master, a pig walk come to here . and said you have eat food after to look the house . I don’t to work nearby have . have .food to eat the dog said when you eat to surpass 200 kilos, they will kill you.
ReplyDeletePolly is a parrot.
ReplyDeleteShe likes to talk a lot.
Polly usually says bad things about others.
Her friends tell her to be careful about her words.
One day Polly saw Foxy,a fox.
Foxy was having a dinner party at his home.
He asked Polly to come.
"Sure.I am going to the dinner party this evening.
What do I have to bring?"Polly said.
"Only you."Foxy said.
From that night on no one saw Polly anymore.
Foxy had her for dinner.
"life"
ReplyDeleteIn the hospital have a small girl, and then the doctor tell her "I am afraid I have bad news need to tell you "You only have half year to live."
The small girl sat in bed and tells the doctor ok I know.
The small girl her don't cry don't say anything and just tell the doctor
"I can't possibly pay you money in that time."
Doctor say "it's ok" but you need to promise to me you will happy every day.
The small story tell us "life is important".